Reuben A

MeghnaK Great so far. what's the main character's name? How did she 'journey' from the bed to the sky? Did she lie down, close her eyes, and then suddenly she ...

What is the 'Gulrich'? I think you should tell us a bit more about Alsana and her three friends and who selected them and why. But other than that, I ...

wizkid515 I think that, firstly, I don't really know anything of James, if you could just tell us a bit more about him. Secondly, something that I always do, is ...

Molly looked down from the mezzanine at a table embroidered with golden leaves, where her mom, Madeline Pleasant, and her dad, Richard Pleasant – the 5th- were sitting. High above ...

Thanks Bickazer, I really need all the critique I can find. Reuben A

Hi Kaylyn, The first Chapter is wonderful....I like the idea of a story beginning with a dream. Great. Reuben A

Hi flytodreams, I'm Reuben A from South Africa (At the most Southern point of Africa if you didn't know. he he.). I think that the prologue to your story is ...

Down the drain Molly looked down from the mezzanine at a table embroidered with golden leaves, where her mom, Madeline Pleasant, and her dad, Richard Pleasant – the 5th- were ...

Hi, everyone, my name is Reuben. I'm new here...Greetings from South Africa!